www/server/staging/proprietary proprietary.html

[Therese Godefroy]

CVSROOT:        /webcvs/www
Module name:    www
Changes by:     Therese Godefroy <th_g> 18/10/02 17:04:11

Modified files:
        server/staging/proprietary: proprietary.html 

Log message:
        Rewording.

CVSWeb URLs:
http://web.cvs.savannah.gnu.org/viewcvs/www/server/staging/proprietary/proprietary.html?cvsroot=www&r1=1.4&r2=1.5

Patches:
Index: proprietary.html
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RCS file: /webcvs/www/www/server/staging/proprietary/proprietary.html,v
retrieving revision 1.4
retrieving revision 1.5
diff -u -b -r1.4 -r1.5
--- proprietary.html    2 Oct 2018 20:45:37 -0000       1.4
+++ proprietary.html    2 Oct 2018 21:04:10 -0000       1.5
@@ -122,15 +122,15 @@
 <hr />
 <ol>
 <li>These are only a few of the techniques that are used to turn proprietary
-software into malware. Each one implies one or more types of injustice. Back
-doors mean insecurity (and surveillance, most often), tethers imply
-surveillance and insecurity, jails and tyrants are instruments of censorship,
-DRM does censorship and/or sabotage, and subscriptions imply interference.
-We don't list each example of malware in all the categories it
+software into malware. Each technique is tightly associatd with one or more
+injustices. Back doors mean insecurity (and surveillance, most often),
+tethers imply surveillance and insecurity, jails and tyrants are instruments
+of censorship, DRM does censorship and/or sabotage, and subscriptions imply
+interference. We don't list each example of malware in all the categories it
 belongs&nbsp;to.</li>
 
-<li><em>Back door:</em>&nbsp; any mechanism that allows modifying files in
-a computer without the user being aware of it and willing to do the
+<li><em>Back door:</em>&nbsp; any mechanism that provides a way of modifying
+files in a computer without the user being aware of it and willing to do the
 modification, whether this mechanism is documented or not.</li>
 
 <li><em>Digital restrictions management, or &ldquo;DRM&rdquo;:</em>&nbsp;
@@ -266,7 +266,7 @@
 
 <p class="unprintable">Updated:
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-$Date: 2018/10/02 20:45:37 $
+$Date: 2018/10/02 21:04:10 $
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 </p>
 </div>