www/philosophy surveillance-vs-democracy.html

[Richard M. Stallman]

CVSROOT:        /web/www
Module name:    www
Changes by:     Richard M. Stallman <rms>       18/01/30 08:16:04

Modified files:
        philosophy     : surveillance-vs-democracy.html 

Log message:
        Minor wording improvements.

CVSWeb URLs:
http://web.cvs.savannah.gnu.org/viewcvs/www/philosophy/surveillance-vs-democracy.html?cvsroot=www&r1=1.56&r2=1.57

Patches:
Index: surveillance-vs-democracy.html
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RCS file: /web/www/www/philosophy/surveillance-vs-democracy.html,v
retrieving revision 1.56
retrieving revision 1.57
diff -u -b -r1.56 -r1.57
--- surveillance-vs-democracy.html      13 Jan 2018 15:37:21 -0000      1.56
+++ surveillance-vs-democracy.html      30 Jan 2018 13:16:04 -0000      1.57
@@ -224,14 +224,14 @@
 files, with free software on your own computer before uploading
 it.</p>
 
-<p>For privacy's sake, you must avoid nonfree software since, as a
-consequence of giving others control of your computing, it
-is <a href="/malware/proprietary-surveillance.html">likely to spy
-on you</a>.
+<p>For privacy's sake, you must avoid nonfree software; if you give
+control of your computer's operations to companies, they
+are <a href="/malware/proprietary-surveillance.html">likely to make it
+spy on you</a>.
 Avoid <a href="/philosophy/who-does-that-server-really-serve.html">service
-as a software substitute</a>; in addition to giving others control of how your
-computing is done, it requires you to hand over all the pertinent data to the
-server.</p>
+as a software substitute</a>; in addition to giving others control of
+how your computing is done, it requires you to hand over all the
+pertinent data to the company's server.</p>
 
 <p>Protect your friends' and acquaintances' privacy,
 too.  <a 
href="http://bits.blogs.nytimes.com/2014/05/21/in-cybersecurity-sometimes-the-weakest-link-is-a-family-member/";>Don't
@@ -240,7 +240,7 @@
 Don't tell a company such as Facebook anything about your friends that
 they might not wish to publish in a newspaper.  Better yet, don't be
 used by Facebook at all.  Reject communication systems that require
-users to give their real names, even if you are going to give yours,
+users to give their real names, even if you are happy to divulge yours,
 since they pressure other people to surrender their privacy.</p>
 
 <p>Self-protection is essential, but even the most rigorous
@@ -596,7 +596,7 @@
 
 <p class="unprintable">Updated:
 <!-- timestamp start -->
-$Date: 2018/01/13 15:37:21 $
+$Date: 2018/01/30 13:16:04 $
 <!-- timestamp end -->
 </p>
 </div>