Re: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper

[David Kastrup]

Peter Wannemacher <address@hidden> writes:

> Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper
> From: Urs Liska
> Subject: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper
> Date: Fri, 19 Apr 2013 23:17:08 +0200
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> Hi,
>
> I like the tone of the paper, but I think it might be a bit long.
>
> I have some grammatical observations below. I will make more if they
> are helpful.
>
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> You wrote on page 4:
> Editor independent
> There isn’t a inseparable unit between editing and processing a docu-
>
> It is common to write:
> There isn't an inseparable unit

And not "between" but rather "of editing and processing".

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> In-place comments
> Practically all plain text formats allow to enter comments inside the
>
>
> I would write:
> Practically all plain text formats allow you to enter comments inside the
> or
> Practically all plain text formats allow one to enter comments inside the
> or
> Practically all plain text formats allow the user to enter comments
> inside the

... allow entering comments ...
... admit comments inside of ...

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David Kastrup