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bug#11862: [PATCH 9/9] doc/lispref/intro.texi: Use passive voice
From: |
Stephen Berman |
Subject: |
bug#11862: [PATCH 9/9] doc/lispref/intro.texi: Use passive voice |
Date: |
Thu, 05 Jul 2012 16:04:22 +0200 |
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Gnus/5.13 (Gnus v5.13) Emacs/24.1 (gnu/linux) |
On Thu, 05 Jul 2012 06:14:00 -0400 Richard Stallman <rms@gnu.org> wrote:
> The value of this variable is the version of Emacs being run. It is a
> string such as @code{"23.1.1"}. The last number in this string is not
> really part of the Emacs release version number; it is incremented
> -each time you build Emacs in any given directory. A value with four
> +each time Emacs is built in any given directory.
>
> Please use the active voice by preference.
> For instance, you could write it this:
>
> each time you build Emacs in a given directory, that increments this
> number.
This sounds rather awkward to me. Would you accept "it gets
incremented" as a "more active passive" alternative? Aside from style,
the statement is inaccurate, isn't it? At least with "make bootstrap"
the last number is always 1.
Steve Berman
bug#11862: [PATCH 6/9] doc/lispref/intro.texi: Re-fill a paragraph, Michael Witten, 2012/07/04
bug#11862: [PATCH 9/9] doc/lispref/intro.texi: Use passive voice, Michael Witten, 2012/07/04
bug#11862: [PATCH 0/9] doc/lispref/intro.texi: Copyediting, Stefan Monnier, 2012/07/04